Use this template to guide your review of your partner’s essay. Answer all questions here, and feel free to add additional notes outside of the categories below.

REMEMBER: Be respectful of the work your partner has put in. Treat your partner as you like to be treated.

Does the essay follow the task? How do you know this? [Look at the assignment itself and the guidelines given.]

Yes, it does because he put everything super structured. I know this because of the way the paragraphs are written.

Locate the thesis–and say it in your own words to be sure you understood it.

Now find the topic sentences. Does each topic sentences sum up or introduce its paragraph effectively?

The consumption of animal products is a vital nutritional component in numerous cultural diets of people across the globe.

Is evidence being used for any and all statements made? Does the author introduce, analyze, and explain the evidence? What’s the strongest piece of evidence?

Yes, he used evidence and explained them. The strongest evidence is “In the United States alone, approximately 10 billion farmland animals are bred and raised annually for consumer consumption (Parr, 2018)”.

Does the paper read smoothly? Are there parts that seem out of place or confusing? (Mark these. Give suggestions if possible.) Add any transitions that would make the organization smoother.

Yes, everything is very structured and perfect.

Write what you consider:

1. The clearest sentence

The consumption of animal products is a vital nutritional component in numerous cultural diets of people across the globe. In the United States alone, approximately 10 billion farmland animals are bred and raised annually for consumer consumption (Parr, 2018).

1. The most confusing sentence

As Deckers (2016) points out, a statistic from the Food and Agricultural Organization of the United Nations (FAO) in 2014 demonstrated that the total animal tonnages by weight from 1961 to 2006 has increased from 71,357,169 tonnes to 262,919,740 tonnes respectively.

Note here any suggested changes in wording, grammar, punctuation, or spelling:

The grammar and everything is perfect.

What single change would make the most improvement in this essay?

I don’t think he should change anything because it’s all good.